Could someone please tell me what they think of my writing?

Nothing negative? So you only want people who say ... "U r such a gud writer?" Well I am sorry but I am not buying it. That first sentence is terrible. Angst? Is that a word you use often? I seriously doubt it. And that part about the t shirts and shoelaces wriggling around your ankles ... neat trick. Sorry but that was about as far as I could read. It is not well written. It needs a lot of editing and work. I strongly suggest you get Stephen King's On Writing and read it like it was your new Bible. This is not skillful writing. You need to read more. As Mr. King says, you cannot be a great writer until you are a great reader. It is very clear from reading this that you have not read very much - at least not very much that is good, strong clics. Sorry. Pax-C